Is this well-written and ready to turn in?

It is not ready to turn in for a grade. Throughout the essay, you have chosen large words to use, and have not used them correctly. There are subject/verb agreement problems. Apathy is not an enemy of earth, but of mankind. It is not due to carelessness, but due to being too tired to care. You have ended a sentence with a preposition, which is wrong. Stop trying to substitute synonyms which you don't understand. If I was grading it, I'm sorry, but it would be a low grade. Re-read it, and check for errors.